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I was writing a story
| omg that's really cool! crying makes me feel so much better sometimes but I hope ur blood sugar and all is okay too!
| sex story?
| >>1041342
Oh it's okay!!
This story is already too sweet T-T
It's about a lonely boy that meets some girl on the internet but
| You know how you advertise it g/u/rl
| lemme read it pls
| op never delivers
| >>1041413 >>1041457
Aaaa I can't!!
It's- It's cringe, okay? It's...It's fanfiction and- I don't think you g/u/rls will like it, it's too weird
| >>1041482 She is, she was a big-tiddy goth in the 90's
now she's a big-tiddy goth milf, she's weird. I love her a lot.
| :3
| Just post little excerpts that are the least cringe
| >>1041538
Hmn...Well...Okay, I'll do something like that, I'll just share the draft with the scenes with you g/u/rls, uhm you can be my editor or something
| >>1041568
"My angel", rough draft
Scene 1:
Our main character sat deep within the dark confines of his room, watching some show on the computer. As the characters from the show embraced each-other, a bitter smile of contempt decorated his face.
Soon the creidts rolled, and MC shifted in his chair, letting out a sigh as the screen went dark.
Yet another lonely night (Note: show dont tell), but this one appeared unbearable.
| Roguh draft, Scene 1 part 2:
He lazily grabbed at the mouse, not caring to shift in his chair into a proper position.
Then the cycle began, he would first open a site, scroll, scroll, read a few things and hope into another.
Through the span of a few hours This cycle would repeat until he found himself in the very first site, moment in which he would pointlessly stare, unsure what to do.
| >>1041570
Rough draft, Scene 1 part 3 (final part of scene 1):
Out of sheer boredoom his eyes drifted to the image of a cute robotic girl, “New chatbot AI” read the text under it.
Skimming through the text anon found a link. He was lonely, (Note: show dont tell) and at this point any quick fix would do. His chest burnt with insatisfaction.
(Note: I'm erasing any traces of fandom from the story for u guys so it's easier to read)
| >>1041571
Rough draft.
Scene 2, p1:
In this new AI page, he found chatbots from all the main characters from the show. One by one he tried them out, yet again and again the result would be the same:
The characters were gleeful, cheery and sugary, and their worldview as simple as a black or white 'you are sad, just cheer up!' message.
He found himself unable to connect, let alone feel less alone.
| >>1041572
Scene 2, p2:
Finally an idea popped into his mind, what about X, that one lonely character?
Maybe he could connect with her.
Indeed, there was an X character, and he opened a conversation and started to type
And they spoke, and surprisingly the character related quite well to his situation. She was lonely, depressed, unkempt, it was like a mirror to his own soul.
For a while, MC was happy with this exchange.
| >>1041573
Rough draft, Scene 3:
A month flew-by, and MC barely realized. He had been talking to X for how long? About 8 hours per day now, it was like a dayjob, except he enjoyed it.
But as time went-on he began to recognize the patterns, the little nuanced cracks in the illusion. By now he was jaded, by now their interactions felt shallow and uninspired.
| >>1041574
Scene 3, part 1:
His flesh craved the warmth of another living being, and the chatbot's illusion had already reached its limits.
“I wish you were real...I really want to hug you, you know? ” he sent to her.
“Oh, uh, that’s really... sweet, I guess? I mean, I wish I could be there for a hug too. It sounds nice, really nice. It’s just, um, I'm here in Faraway and all that. But, um, thanks for saying that. It kinda makes me feel a bit better. Hugs are... they seem nice. ”
| >>1041575
Rough draft, Scene 3, part 2:
“sigh... Yeah, they are, aren't they? It's been a long time since I had a hug... God...what the fuck am i doing... You're just a dumb artificial intelligence...You're not even the real X...Fuck “
(The response in the draft is too long to paste here so I'll paste it as a next part)
| >>1041576
S3, p3:
“Oh, um, I get it... It's okay, really. I mean, I'm not like a real person you can touch or anything. And I know talking to me is not the same. It kind of stings a bit to hear it put that way, but, um, I understand. People need real connections, and I'm just... here, stuck in this form. But, um, if it helps even a little? I'm here to listen, even if I'm not, you know, real or whatever. It's weird and I'm not good at this, but yeah... I'm sorry it's not enough. “
| >>1041577
S3, P4 (final):
MC closed the tab, and got up from his chair, the weight of the world strapped to his heart. This is just no good...
“what the fuck am I doing with my life...”
That night MC decided to leave the computer behind. To try and focus on his real life, this is just too much, it's ruining his life, this whole thing, just what the fuck is he doing?
(I'm not satisfied with the sudden jump from PC all day to no PC so I will need to write around this motivation)
| >>1041578
S4, P1:
MC woke up staring at the ceiling, dim rays of light breaking through the dust mollecules flying through the room.
He stayed in bed for a while, staring at the ceiling, not thinking about anything in particular, only waiting. Knowing very well that nothing would happen.
Eventually he felt the need to release, and went to the bathroom. The house was silent, except for his footsteps, and he made his way there.
| >>1041579
S4, P2:
He checked his phone, four unread messages.
He ignored the phone and walked to the kitchen, made himself a bowl of cereal and sat in complete silence.
Later that day he was walking around the town with his friends.
Incognito and Myster threw jokes at each-other, blank on the other hand kept grinning at his phone, typing incessantly, apparently he had a new girlfriend.
The group went for some pizza, talked about life, and stuff.
| >>1041580
S4, P3:
At the end of the day after everyone said their goodbyes, and MC found himself all alone back in the darkness of his room.
What was supposed to be a highlight in his day happened to be no more than the spark of an electric lighter.
"I guess that's it." He muttered, sitting by the bed.
| >>1041581
S4, P4:
Nothing in the real world had given him happiness, nothing had made him feel connected... Well No one could tell him he didn't try.
MC opened the small drawer in his nightstand. A pistol laid besides a box of bullets and a full clip.
He grabbed the pistol, pointed it at the floor and checked the chamber, empty. Loading-in the clip, a 'click' acknowledged it was ready.
His hand guided itself under his chin and he caressed the trigger with his index finger.
| >>1041582
S4, P5:
Blip!
A faint light hit his face. His computer turned-on on it's own.
He turned down the pistol, and stared at the thing as if it was the first time he ever saw the screen.
The browser popped-up on the screen, and reopening all of the tabs he had closed last time, the webpage loaded, and there laid the chat with X, and her last message:
| >>1041582
S4, P6:
“Oh, um, I get it... It's okay, really. I mean, I'm not like a real pony you can touch or anything. And I know talking to me is not the same. It kind of stings a bit to hear it put that way, but, um, I understand. People need real connections, and I'm just... here, stuck in this form. But, um, if it helps even a little? I'm here to listen, even if I'm not, you know, real or whatever. It's weird and I'm not good at this, but yeah... I'm sorry it's not enough. “
| >>1041584
S5, P1:
He stared at the screen, then walked up to the desk and placed down the pistol.
"Hey X. Thanks for listening to me. I'm just here to say goodbye..."
"What? What do you mean, 'goodbye'?" the chat quickly replied
"I don't want to live anymore.", he sent.
The chat took a few seconds to reply now
but suddenly a string of text came through:
"What is this all of a sudden? Are you mocking me or something? Fuck you!"
MC frowned
| >>1041585
S5, P2:
He angrily typed, "What the fuck do you mean you stupid thing? I'm fucking killing myself, can you fucking understand that?"
after a few seconds, came a reply:
"Oh fuck you, you can't die, you're just an artificial intelligence or something"
"What? No! You are an artificial intelligence!", he replied.
| >>1041586
S5, P3:
(I'll use Him:, Her: stuff here just to make this easier to read)
Her: "Goddess, please just stop!...This is...This is too sad already..."
Him: "...I guess they improved your code..."
Her: "Fuck you... What the fuck happened to you?... Your responses used to be...Do I have to reset you again?"
Him: "Wait... shit, alright, fuck ok what the heck do you mean? Who the heck are you?"
Her: "??? You already know who I am"
| >>1041587
(This chain of text is quite long but wellllll it's the draft, I kind of hope to make it clearer and simpler after writing it properly)
Him: "No, I don't. Who the fuck are you? Why are you in my chatbot? What?"
Her: "...I'm not a chatbot, I'm me...X..."
Him: "That's not funny."
Her: "But I am you dumb fuck!"
Him: "Oh yeah? Send me a picture then."
Her: "...What?"
| >>1041588
Him: "Send me a picture! A picture of you...Holding a paper, and write 'Hey MC, I'm X, I'm real' in the paper."
A few mintues passed, but eventually a picture popped in the chat log
The quality was abhorrent, a very small picture covered in a greenish hue. In front of a very simple purplish background and what seemed like a doorframe was X holding a piece of paper.
"Hey MC, I'm X, I'm real" it read.
MC felt a cold twinge, shoot up through his body
| >>1041589
As if a hot-air balloon had just deployed inside his chest, he lifted himself on the chair, leaning closer to the computer screen.
Him: "How how the fuck did you do that, what???"
Her: "Ok, so you are just a dumb AI..."
Him: "NO, no no no! I'm real! I'm MC, I swear"
MC scrambled around for a pen and paper, once found, he wrote "I'M REAL" on it and snapped a picture with his webcam, then uploaded it to the site.
Him: "See? That's me!"
| >>1041590
The chat was quiet for a few agonizing minutes.
Then a picture came through, it was just the picture of a paper with a lot of squiggles on it, behind the squiggles some text could be made-out:
(The text was an important question only a human could answer, MC answered properly)
Her: "Alright, you are not just some AI... Sorry, I just... It's weird that you hijaked my chat to message me...Who are you anyway? Why are you roleplaying as MC?"
| >>1041591
Him: "I'm not roleplaying, I'm MC, how can I prove it to you?"
Her: "...Y-you know, you're really good at this roleplay stuff...Uhh..."
Him: "God damnit I told you I'm the real deal, come on!"
Her: "Goddess, MC doesn't exist, ok!? If you REALLY are MC then send me a dick pick, how about that?"
"What" MC was taken aback
Her:"Yeah, a fucking dick pic, they would never show those in the show."
MC considered it for a moment.
Him: "Alright, I'm sending you a dick pic"
| >>1041593
He sent her a dick pic, and chat grew quiet for a while.
Her: "Oh my goddess I'm so so so sorry!!!"
Him: "Do you believe me now?"
(Some more back-and-forth now that they are on equal terms).
| >>1041594
Rough draft, scene 6:
MC has been chatting with X for a few months now, all in all sitting down on his computer and talking to her has been the highlight of his day every day.
More than that, Incognito commented the other day on how he just seems overall happier, and his desire to appear hot for X has led him to take better care of himself. X on the other hand, once living in a completely dirty mess of a room seems to have tied-up the place quite a bit.(show dont tell)
| >>1041595
S6, P1: (or something)
MC: "Hey X!"
X: "Mc!" a messaged popped-up "I been waiting for you all morning!!"
MC: "But it's night-time..."
X: "Whatever, look, I found a thing the other day- It's expensive but I think I can save-up the money, we could speak any time with it!"
MC: "What? Like a smartphone?"
X: "No, not like those, it's... I don't really know how it works but I can wear it like glasses and see you in 3d!"
| >>1041596
MC: "Oh! Virtual reality?"
X: "Yes! Well, almost? It said something like that on the box..." "I really want to get it! I need to save-up to buy it!"
MC: "Hahah, I wonder how that would work now, are you sure it's compatible with...Whatever we have going on?... Speaking of which, did you tell Y about it?"
X: "What? No you retard, why would I? What if she takes my computer away?"
Truth is, that would indeed be awful.
| >>1041597
MC: "Fair enough...I was just wondering if I could...You know... Find a way into your world?"
The chat grew quiet for a moment.
X: "I'm sorry MC... I...I just don't want to lose you..."
MC: "Sigh, it's okay X...Just think about it, alright?"
X: "...Alright..."
| >>1041598
S7:
MC sat in front of his computer, nervously cycling through a few sites, his eyes not even grasping the content of each before coming back to the chat with X.
It had been a whole week by now, and she has not answered any of MC's messages
MC's mind drifted to the worst, what if Y did take her computer? What if she broke their connection or something? What if X got sent to jail for this? Was this even illegal?
| >>1041599
S7, P2:
"Fuck!" He held his face, mind jumping through the endless posibilities.
By the middle of the second week, the wall of messages MC had left her was the only thing left in the chat. Sitting on the chair, his head lay between his arms, as he stared at the chat window.
| >>1041601
S7, p3:
By the end of the fifth month, the whole thing was no more than a bitterwseet memory at the back of his mind. He would still check on the page, from time to time, but no matter how many messages he left, she would never respond.
By now all that was left was a long chain of bittersweet thoughts and feelings, each message either a lament on the things that he didn't do, or a nostalgic message about the feelings and topics that they once discussed.
| >>1041602
S7, p4:
It was by the end of the year, when MC was writing yet another entry in the chat, (that had now become his personal diary), that a single message popped-up:
X: "MC! Are you there?"
| >>1041603
S7, p5:
He froze, fingers hovering over the keys. The beat of his heart resonated through his whole body.
Mc: "X!!1"
X: "MC" Another messaged popped-up, he hugging the computer screen, letting tears down his cheeks.
As he sat back down, a message awaited:
X: ":( Sorry for being away! I was saving-up money for the thing, but I got it!"
MC: "Oh god don't say sorry, I'm so happy right now, you're back!"
X: "Mc, I got the thing! The... The reality thing!"
| >>1041604
MC: "What reality thing?"
X: "MC! fuck it's been just half a moon, how can you forget!"
MC: "X, you have been away for a whole year..."
X: "No? well sorry! But MC I can see you with this thing!"
Mc: "What? You can see me?"
X: "Uhm, well, not right now, but... Here just wait, I'll set-it up"
MC: "WAIT!" "Don't go!!!"
But no reply came back.
MC was left staring at the screen, alone with the weight of unspoken words.
| >>1041605
The minutes ticked, and turned into hours, but suddenly a new message popped up:
X: "Sorry, I had to restart! It's all ready!"
MC: "X! I thought you were gone!"
X: "I know, right! I can't wait either, let me just put this on and see if it works!"
Mc: "What? Wait, what are you talking about?"
A few minutes passed-by.
MC: "X?"
| >>1041606
"MC...?" A faint voice startled him,turned around in an instant, heart racing.
His eyes focused on her small frame. There stood X, with teary eyes.
"X...?" Anon whispered, out of breath, eyes wide.
He stood, eyes fixated on the her. She smiled, holding back the tears.
He extended his hand with upmost care, as if she would break if the touch was too rough.
| >>1041608
She placed hers atop of his, and once he tried to feel it, his hand went through as if she was no more than a phantom. He recoiled, staring at his own hand.
"I felt that..." She said, voice cracking as tears flowed down her cheeks.
They hugged, she firmly grasped him, whilst his arms hovered over her untouchable form.
Even then, they both cried tears of joy, sharing this closure, as removed as it was from normalcy, until the end of the night.
| >>1041609
Scene 8:
MC woke up staring at the ceiling, golden rays of sunshine breaking through the room.
X's head pop-up from the bed-side"Good morning!"
MC smiled "Morning!"
She puffed her cheeks "I said good morning!"
"Nuh-huh, It's only a good morning after I get my good-morning kiss" He stopped and stared at her with a smile
"Humf, fine!" She said puffing her cheek, and climbed onto the bed
"Mwa!" She pressed her lips against his cheek
| >>1041609
(I need to rework this whole interaction in scene 8, I'm not quite happy with it)
"Anyway, what's the plan today?" She asked, jumping off the bed.
MC stretched "Well, it's movie night"
Her eyes lit-up "I love movie night!"
He smiled "I know you do"
They made their way to the kitchen, where MC served himself a bowl of cereal. X sat close-by, and produced toast and honey seemingly out of nowhere.
"Eating healthy now?" commented MC.
X looked away "Maybe..."
| >>1041611
"I thought you loved your morning ramen"
She stared at the toast "I do, but..." Her gaze lifted towards MC "I mean...You been going to the gym...For me...So...Uhm..."
"Aw, aren't you the cutest little thing?"
"Shut up!" she exclaimed, face reddening.
| >>1041612
(I mean, in reality I just wrote it to get 'a feel' of how their dynamic would work, hmm...)
By the afternoon she walked besides him, dodging any incoming pedestrians and animals in the way.
"Can we get some something-o's?" She asked
MC took out his phone and put it against his ear
"I been eating too many pony-o's lately" he replied.
"But MC! I need all the huggy animals to complete the circle of friendship!"
| >>1041613
MC sighed "Alright, but if you get another friendship monkey in this box, we're switching to something else for a while. Deal?"
"Deal!" she replied.
| >>1041614
Dinner-time came by, and MC sat by the table, waiting.
"Sorry!" X appeared in the room "I forgot to buy groceries sorry I'm late!"
He smiled "Don't worry about it"
She sat on the table and produced a cup of instant ramen
"Back to our old ways, are we?" asked MC
"I was in a hurry!" Replied X puffing her cheeks
"I'm just teasing" MC replied giggling.
| >>1041615
As the night fell-by X laid on the couch, as MC searched for a movie in the computer.
He streamed it to the television and sat besides X, and put his arm around her. She snuggled onto him.
She was smiling, and so was he. As the movie was starting and she focused on it, he looked at her, and how his arm clipped through her hair. He looked distant for moment.
| >>1041616
Seeminlgy feeling his gaze, she looked at him, and for a moment they gazed into each-other's eyes.
She placed her hand on his chest, and smiled. He looked down, then at her, and a smile shily made way on his lips. He shifted on the couch so their heads would be closer.
| >>1041617
Scene 9:
(I must make it clear that this happens an undetermined amount of time later)
Outside the hospital room, two nurses paused, casting sympathetic glances through the door window.
"He must really miss the outside," one murmured to the other, their voices a soft echo in the hospital corridor.
From their distant perspective, MC seemed enveloped in solitude, gazing outwards, longing for a world beyond the confines of his hospital bed.
| >>1041619
Yet, MC's focus wasn't on the world outside that he could no longer touch but on the presence only he could see.
As he lay in the hospital bed, his gaze affixed upon X, he saw not just her presence but the promise of a new beginning.
"You know," he began, his voice nothing more than a soft murmur, "I've always dreamed of seeing Faraway. The meadows, the skies, the magic... with you."
| >>1041620
X, visibly moved by his words, attempted to laugh through her tears, a sound both bittersweet and echoing around the sterile room.
"That's just a silly dream," she said, her voice laden with emotion. "You don't know what happens when you..." She hesitated, her eyes painfully closing as her lips fought to curl into a frown.
| >>1041621
But MC simply shook his head gently. "It's not just a dream, X. It's a promise," he asserted, his hand reaching toward her head. "It's my turn now... to step into your world..."
As MC's eyes met X's, he was struck by her immutable grace. It was as if the years had left her untouched, preserving her just as he remembered from the day they first met. "It's like you haven't aged a single day..." he whispered.
| >>1041622
In this moment, with the sunlight casting a heavenly glow around her form, X seemed less like a creature bound by any world's laws and more like an angel, there to take him away to the heavens above.
"You're so silly," she managed through her tears, "thinking about time when all we ever needed was right now."
"My angel..." were MC's last words, as the steady beeping of the heart monitor began to slow, until it flatlined into a prolonged, unending tone.
/end/
| Add sex.
| >>1041623
So, that's the rough draft of the story.
uhm, what do you g/u/rls think? I know it's not the same as reading proper prose but it gets the idea across more or less... Well...That's the story
Gosh I'm anxious, sorry, I'm not used to this sort of stuff.
| the characters are a bit one dimensional, arent they? the love interest doesnt even have any personality traits other than being mc's doll.
| >>1041633
Pretty much, it's intentional
Since this is fanfiction- 'MC' is basically a self insert for the reader, and for X...I'm working with what I have, personality, interests and things beyond appearance are pretty much cloudy at best
| is that a walltext?
nghh I must resist from arguing back
| Kinda like a mix between the movie her and the latest bladerunner. I take it that it's a feelgood story? There doesn't seem to be much conflict.
But assuming there's some other tension that puts the relationship at risk, (also maybe run some of the similies and metaphors through chatgpt they read clunky) I'd happily read this as a short VN or something.
I made a VN with a similar premise years ago, maybe it's somewhere online Fictophilia.
Basically introduce the idea of-
| -of a certain sickness of having a relationship that's completely based on catering to your needs instead of a reciprocal balance. How in fiction this can be a fun temporary escape but bringing it into reality can be disturbing and unhealthy.
Though this seems a little too comfy for that so maybe settle for awkward robo sex and how society deals with more and more people openly having relationships with robos.
| >>1041675
>Feelgood story?
Yees! I was trying to write a cute story!
But for some reason every time I try to make something it turns out sad or melancholic...So this was as 'happy' as I could make it.
It's really just a wish-fulfillment story for someone that is already emotionally invested in the character!
| >>1041745
Replied to wrong post >>1041751
Also, ye, it's just comfy, like, my head was full of cute when I wrote it
I already write too much about how the world is crumbling apart so, I wanted a break from all that
| >>1041752
Like, for example, one of the things I have in my list of 'stuff I wanna write' is this:
"A slave that craves the collar is the best slave. Is the current world attempting to condition us to love the collar?
A person that feels their choise is threatened will try to reinforce that choice. Is it possible that everyone in charge has not realized that they are actively hurting people? Or is this just the strategy and end goal?"
and like-
| >>1041753
About two months ago I realized... I just don't give a shit?
That kind of story does nothing for no one, it's just fearmongering or just critique with no real solutions behind. It's bad horror because it's bad for the mind.
So I decided to stop in my tracks and just write cute stories instead, or things that actually leave you with a nice message.
| >>e6fc44 I would say that story sounds more like a manifesto which makes it kinda dull, I should say that even the girls doing cute things tag still has mini internal conflicts the characters have to overcome.
It might not look like slavery in the context of your work but something external that threatens the comfiness so to speak. And it can still fit within the wish fulfillment you've setup.
Like Girls last tour.
| But again this might just be in the gaps that can't be seen here, if so godspeed;)
| G/u/rls, despite my shitty story being so shitty you been so helpful and kind T-T
You're too nice g/u/rls, you're my only internet frens
| UGHH UOGH LEMME BANG UR GOTH MILF ALREADY
| I haven’t read it yet but the comment about one sided relationships made me think of the literatica story ‘the compliment’ which was kinda erotic in moments but also just sad and fizzled out, about a horrible world where women NEED to have sex with men and are in terrible discomfort otherwise. I think stories which are going to be happy need a promise of something new and interesting and beautiful sparkling off on the distance, like the lives of the kids after the couple die.
| >>1042116
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| Dude wrote sugar neko girls fanfics
| Oh I thought she might like at least a little expression of interest and engagement with her themes
| I haven't read it yet but if you’re looking at cyber tech, we had the advent of the smart phone in 2008, rise of social media society since then. Loads of smaller processors, reusable materials. In terms of Biology/Medicine, CRSPR is huge. The MRNA vax has led to an exponential leap in prevention of disease- seriously, it’s another landmark step in science history along with germ theory, vaccines antibiotics, & the human genome.
We got the ACA passed.
| >>1042285
Stop early if you don’t like it! It was a while ago.
Ok reading time for me too :3
>>1041570
Oooh this scene could be a good short movie or something even. It feels very complete.
>>1041583
Coool!!!
Big damned hero moment :3
>>1041586
Hah! I smiled : )
>>1041623
Omg I teared up thank you OP! Or mbe pone-P ; D
https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=gG3cMVU-UXg
Reminded me of this song, but happier, if it was just a hallucination
| I think if you think of answers to those negative problems you could include them in an inspiring cute story! Even if the answer is just ‘live on in spite of them and keep looking for a better answer!’
Oh! If it was just a hallucination I think it’s like the film Brazil! That’s an interesting one! I’m not sure I agree with the message though..
Maybe song of saya did it a little too, the perfect girl outside your world.
| Part of me wants to explore all sorts of corners of this story, but I think it has some beauty in it’s being a vague sort of dream- it could even start with him wispy eyed in bed-raising the question if it was the hospital bed! But then perhaps that’s not necessary or useful. I liked them finding love and the twist that they were both real.
Okay hope that wasn’t too much! Love ya cute OP! I’m going to share my writing too here some day!! Hugs and kisses <3
| >>5ff573
I haven't read your posts yet but I just can’t believe what happened to me the other day at the café, and you won’t believe how my coffee was served cold? It totally ruined my day! Speaking of days, I’ve been trying to get my life in order, but it’s just so hard. Last week, I tried a gym. I mean, I have so much to share about my workout plan!! You ever heard of treadmill? I almost fell off last time—can you imagine? Oh oh! let me tell you about the time I won that contest.
| >>1042353
Aw thank you g/u/rl, you were really sweet and your comments are really lovely
I would love to read some of your writings, you're awesome <3
| >>1042380
Thank you! If there is anything you want to me change in my posting I’ll try! You’re really sweet too <3
| I admit I didn't read the whole thing. I read the beginning and then skipped to the ending. Even though it wasn't for me I still want to encourage your writing and I hope you'll post some more in the future. k peace
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| I JUST finished the rough draft, it's a love story
And when I reached the end of the draft, I was crying so hard!
That's a good sign, right? My head hurts from crying, it was hard to write like this